Despcrition : we got handed a book after we read the book we had a task and that task is to retell the story .
Feedback :great job Kate I love it! U should have a green target.
Feed forward: nothing really lol dr . Nutella cat .
This is my Plan .
On top of a hill in the country there lived maraea and her older brother maki and of course their parents. Maraea is seven and maki is eleven . Their mum was pregnant, so maraea and maki had to go out to the spooky ,dark, terrifieing ,creepy night , and run to their uncles house to get his car so they can get to hospital . Maraea was scared of the moon because what happened to Rona . But they ran as fast as they could zooming down the the hill like lightning , through big bushy trees blowing in the the dark windy night , round a dreadful grave yard , past a church as they were passing the church tawhirmatea (God of the winds)was whipping up the big fat poffy clouds . Suddenly maraea heard a whisper from the trees but she hesitated . She knew that she needed to get to uncles house because Maraea and maki came all this way and they need the car for mum. Kate